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Vala
Apr 5, 2017 21:48:28 GMT -5
Post by Deleted on Apr 5, 2017 21:48:28 GMT -5
Vala
NICKNAME Val AGE 16 BIRTHDAY 12/5/2001 SPECIES Human GENDER Female SEXUALITY Bi DORM pick one for me POWER Kinetic Manipulation- Enables Vala to control, and produce Kinetic energy around herself. This can result in energy beams, producing light, draining energy from machines, explosions, and various other effects. Energy taking from mechanical devices can be used in forms of attacks such as energy beams. Due to her lack of skill it is very difficult for Vala to control her power. Generally speaking this only happens when she is fueled by strong emotions and is random. Her ability to manipulate energy at such a level is quite taxing on her person and it drains her strength quite rapidly.
Kinetic Strengthening- Increasing the amount of energy within parts of her body Vala can strengthen her muscles, bones, and even her senses to super human levels. Due to her lack of control in her abilities using this power has a downside. For instance if she increases her levels of sight she will go deaf, or if she increases the strength of her arms her legs with grow very weak making it impossible to run. These draw backs are only activate as long as her ability is.
APPEARANCE Standing at five foot four and 110 lbs Vala is by no means a large person. Having spent years on specific diet, and a rough physical regiment Vala's body is well toned, though she is curvy in just the right places. Pale skin from years deprived of sunlight make the freckles that line just under her blue eyes stand out strongly. Slightly rounded face, small nose and soft pink lips Vala can be seen as cute; luckily the scars cannot be seen on her face. Falling from her head and down to shoulders Vala's orange hair tends to cover her eyes from the world. Generally speaking Vala wears long sleeved shirts, and jeans to hide the various scars which can be found across most of her skin. Strapped around her neck she wears a silver choker and matching bracelets which suppress her powers. Shy, and self concise of her self Vala carries herself with eyes cast down for the most part finding it hard to make eye contact with others.
PERSONALITY After the grievous experiments she has undergone Vala is highly moody from day to day. Much like a tide they come and go; their degrees varying with each wave. When she isn't in a funk for the most part she is the quiet type. Not really one to make first contact with others she keeps to herself. While she isn't a socialite she can carry a conversation when the need arises. For the most part she would rather find a quite place far away from the waking world and watch clouds as they pass above.
Aside from her moody nature Vala enjoys the simple things in life that many over look. Being out doors in nature is were she loves to be the most. Often she will find a cozy nook under the protective shade of a tree where she can read in peace. Not one to get physically involved when speaking her movements are gentle, as is her voice unless her temper rises. When in a rage it can take quite a bit to calm her down and sometimes force is needed. When the blood beings to boil Vala's demeanor changes from its calm temperament to a fireball of anger and shouting. It can be hard to calm her down once she has gotten in this state.
WEAKNESSES Vala is extremely withdrawn from others and much prefers being alone. Though generally the silent type Vala's temper is quick to rise when irritated or angered. Once the bonds of friendship have opened Vala is much friendly to those that have reached out to her though she hold her past close.
Vala's powers are her major strength and weakness as she has little to no control over how they will react. Considered highly dangerous if she goes on a rampage she must wear a silver choker, and bracers that keep her powers in check. She finds the weighted accessorizes annoying though she bears them to protect others. The devices which restrain her power are held in place by the energy that flows through her body. If Vala is drained of her strength they can be removed but otherwise it would take great strength to pry them from her. If removed Vala is unable to control her powers and they will be unleashed uncontrollably. Luckily this will not last long as she will burn herself out shortly after her dampeners have been removed.
Vala is quite self confidante of herself and how others view her. She hides the scars which cover her body with long flowing clothes, as she wishes not to relive her pass. Even to those she might build trust with she will be very concerned about their opinion of her making it difficult for Vala to open up. STRENGTHS Determined- Having a hard head Vala will never give up when her mind has been put to a task. As time has proven this can sometimes lead to both good and bad things.
Knowledgeable- Spending most days by herself Vala found her time spent within the depths of books. Anything from the sciences to the great plays of the pass she loves to read.
Nimble- Short, thin and curvy Vala found that rather than relying on her abilities she could use her small stature to her benefit. Able to bend and stretch in various ways Vala can squeeze in small places, and jump over tall objects with ease.
HISTORY Born in the first snows of the year Vala was brought into the world without the loving embrace of a mother. She was told her mother died in birth while her father left long before then. Seemingly abandoned but not without a home Vala was taken into the "care" of a secret organization. From before her birth it was known that she would be gifted. The energies which were produced from her mother womb's could be felt clear across a room.
For a time her childhood was what could be considered normal. Learning from the teachers within the confines of a lab, playing, drawing, whatever it was that a child would do. It wasn't until she was 8 that the real experiments began. Everything from trying to harness her ability for weaponizing, to mass production of unlimited energy she was tested for. Sometimes it was simple needles in the back while other times invasive was performed. The constant tests harmed more than just the flesh as her mind slowly decayed over the years of long isolation and pain. By the time she was 14 she was little more than a shell of a human.
Eventually Vala was pushed to her limit in the experiments that they performed on her. Using heavy restraints the idea of the test was to electrically stimulate her nerves with implanted electrodes. The idea was to tap into her powers through activating latent nerves which seemed to be connected with her abilities. However prior tested noted that her abilities are only activate when she is awake. That being said the test could not be preformed with the use of any sedative. The insensions were painful enjoy but the shocks which flowed through her body were beyond intimation. It was if insides were caught in a never ending ocean of fire and there was no escape. It was then that Vala's mind shattered and the true extent of her powers expelled. An eruption of pure energy exploded from her person that vaporized everything within a mile. Where a hidden laboratory had once been there was nothing left but a smoldering crater and a lone figure..
The memory of the day is known only to Vala and even the details are fuzzy. Days later she awoke within the walls of academy with no idea of where she was even less so as to how she got there. Learning just what the academy does for people like Vala she was convinced to join, and without a place to call home she didn't have much of a choice. Before Vala could be welcomed into society she spent over a year in therapy to deal with the pains of her past. Here she learned how to trust others again, socialize, cope with her past and becoming comfortable with gear which suppressed her powers. IN CHARACTER SAMPLE Crashing waves tore the bare, worn flesh that was the cliff side. For years they warped the earth turning from a once solid rigged face to a moss laden surface that glistened in the morning light. Salt fresh upon the air, the gentle hum of the ocean, and a blue from horizon to horizon. It was a scene that pleasured the senses leaving behind a warmth that flowed through out the air. Times like this when the sun was low, and the world was taking its first breaths everything seemed... good.
Sitting beneath the branches of a grand oak whose branches swayed in creaking movements in the wind was a long figure. Illuminated from the sun's blissful rays she sat in a companionable silence with the beauty before her. Mirroring the leaves that danced this way and that in the gentle winds the fine strands of her flame filled hair whipped about.
"Mmm... so this is what I've been missing out on." Words low so that they were only for herself.
For years the idea of a blue sky, chirping birds, the scent of salt which stuffed her nostrils to maximum capacity where only things she knew of in pictures. The various books that were brought into her chamber held many images of the world. Massive stretches of sand without a drop of water for miles in any direction. Valleys so packed with lush green that it was hard to image light ever reaching the ground. Often times, in her dreams, she would visit such places. Like many dreams they were a hollow comparison to what she experienced now. Staring off into the vast world before the sweet, calm that can come over her filled with a sour pit.
"Bastards...." The word spat from her mouth as memories flashed through her mind of those which kept her from the world's beauty.
Victor Lozada
Template by Sky ★ Inspired by Laika of GS
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Vala
Apr 7, 2017 12:45:19 GMT -5
Post by sky on Apr 7, 2017 12:45:19 GMT -5
Hello, and welcome to Foresta Academy! It's so great to see your application, but before you are accepted, there are a few things we need to address!
First, you left your dorm selection empty! We have three dorms at Foresta - Pyxis, Lyra, and Serpens, and you need to choose one in order to be accepted.
I have a few problems with your power section, but I need to talk to Seren about it first, so I'll drop another comment when we've had our discussion. As a fair warning, though, you may have to bring down the scope of your powers.
Your appearance section is fine, but I would appreciate another 2-3 sentences describing her appearance beyond physical adornments. How does she carry herself? What kind of frame does she have- is she thin or athletic? What is her facial shape? You don't have to answer all of these, but it should give you an idea of what to add.
Your personality section has one or two grammar and spelling mistakes that make it a little difficult to read, so I would recommend reviewing those- the one that stands out to me, at the end of the first paragraph, is "For the most part she would rather find a quite place far away from the awaken world". I would also like you to clarify what she is like when angry, since it seems to be a big part of her personality- you clarify what her normal temperament is, but I want to know how Vala is when she's upset! Is she all clenched fists and teeth? Is she loud? Is she quiet and seething? Aside from that, your personality section seems fine!
Your weakness section is too short, as I can only see two distinguishable weaknesses - her introversion, and her lack of control over her powers. I need at least one more weakness, and I would like you to flesh out the restrictions on her powers more- what happens when she loses control of her powers? Does her mood affect her powers? HOW do the choker and bracers keep her power in check? Are they removable? What happens if someone attempts to remove them?
Your history section is great, but I'd love some more information on how she was "pushed to her limit". What did they do to her? How was the lab destroyed? Did Vala leave unscathed, or badly injured? Does she know if people survived or not?
In general, you should probably re-read through your app and check for spelling, grammar, and syntax errors. I found a few places where things were misspelled, sentences were oddly structured, or words were entirely missing. Your in-character sample is great, so I'm sure that you also value correcting minor writing mistakes
I'm going to talk to Seren about your powers so you may need to make even more additional edits beyond these, but for now let me know when you've made the above edits and let me know, either by posting here or through PM, when I should check your application again! Also, don't be afraid to chat us up in the chatbox, and I'm always available in PMs if you have any questions!
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Vala
Apr 8, 2017 20:54:08 GMT -5
Post by Deleted on Apr 8, 2017 20:54:08 GMT -5
Did the fixes hope it's better now
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Vala
Apr 16, 2017 22:05:27 GMT -5
Post by Seren on Apr 16, 2017 22:05:27 GMT -5
Hi, Vala! I just wanted to let you know real quick that it's okay for you pick out Vala's dorm! That's actually what we want. Whatever dorm you feel as though would fit with her personality and her desires.
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