misha alieen pirece

Name: Misha Alieen Pirece

Gender: Female

Age: 13

Power(s): she can shapeshift into any animal and can speak to animals and, has enhanced abilities of that animal she shapeshifts that include: hearing,speed,smell,strength,and sight. She was born with the power but, it started when she turned seven on her birthday. when she first discovered her power she knows how to control it but, anger makes it go out of hand.

Appearance: she is 5ft. 5in. tall and weighs 118 pounds. Her face features are soft yet, sharp. Her eyes are a dark yellow but, the puples change on the animal form she is in. She has wavy light brunette hair that in the sunlight it almost looks blond. Her hairstyle ts to her mid back with side bangs. Her body figure is normal yet, has muscle. She has two piercing on her right ear and, three on her left. She was also born with a trible birth mark but people mistake it as a tattoo on her left arm.

Personality: Misha is a goody-goody but, has a bad side with her temper. She is really caring and nice to others but, with mean people hurting her friends or family her animalistitic side will take over. She deals with the bullies with just walking away before her animalistic side will take over. Misha is wild and crazy yet, fun and funny. Her hobbies contain playing music, dancing, hanging out, and loves to shapeshift all the time! She behaves like a young child but, is not when she needs it. She talks english with a california accent. She usually has her hands behind her back without doing anything and, when she sits her legs are always crossed and she loves to eat a lot but she wont gain any thing.

Weaknesses: Her weaknes consist of her temper she can not control it at times and, it will make her turn into a animal.
Another weakness is food and it will make her do almost anything. Lasty her other weakness and it can kill her is a silver sword not silver but a really sharp sword can kill her or inger her badly.

strengths: she is really smart and she has the enhanced abilities including her powers.

History & Family: Misha was born in californa and lived with her mom and dad with no siblings. It was a normal life for a child until at age 7 when she first discovers her powers her parnets got worried and were going to take her to the hospital but, on the way there a semi-truck hit the car and it became a horrible crash that misha's parents died and she survived with miner broken ribs and leg. When she recovered she had to go to an orphanage because the police officers could not find any relatives. When she first arrived at a orphanage in californa called sunny girls orphanage she got bullied and almost lashed out on the bullies there but, she can barley control her anger. After spending 6 years at the orphanage and the bullies she had finally control her powers without anyone knowing.

In Character sample: Misha's P.O.V (this is when she go's to the orphanage)

I had been told that my parents didn't make it from the crash today. I have been crying non-stop the whole way the poilce officer drove me to the orphanage. "it's okay sweetheart it will get better",she tells me while pulling into a driveway at the orphanage. i wipe my tears and stoped sniffleing from my little brawl in the car. She opens the car door and I get out following her up to the door. She rings the door bell and we wait until a lady caked in make up opens the door."yes how may i help you?", she asks nicely while having a smile on her face but, she frowns when she see's me but, smiles fast so the officer wont see it. "Hello madam,misha here is going to be staying at the orpahanage here if thats okay",the officer tells her and gives her a fold with my information in it."No problem the girls here will get along with her just fine!",the lady says. The officer smiles and leaves me with the lady. As soon as she lets me in she grabs my arm hard and says,"okay listen up here missy! you are going to help clean this here place while ill be in my room sleeping. DO I MAKE MYSLEF CLEAER!", she screams at me. i quckly nod my head getting scared. She yanks my arm hard and shoves her into a room with girls and leaves. Nine girls in the room that look older than me make their way towards me while having smirks on their faces. One girl pushes me too the floor and says"I'm sorry you'll be sleeping on the floor their is nine beds for us and none for you." she walks away with her followers. 'great i have a mean lady and girls that ill be living with' i thought while driving of to sleep on the floor.

Alright, this is a fairly good starting basis for an app, though we tend to expect a bit more detail in most of the sections.

Let’s start off with the power. Given that she is thirteen years old I have a tough time believing that she would already have such a good grasp on her powers. Besides that, wouldn’t it be more interesting to have your character develop with their powers instead of just having them? It’s just a suggestion, but I’m just saying there would be a bit more to do character wise if she wasn’t so skilled already. Besides, the ability to shapeshift into any animal at will is a bit overpowered, perhaps some limitation could be added? Like she can morph into any animal, but it takes time, however, there are a few that she’s comfortable with and can transform into faster? Again just suggestions, but you probably get the point, it’d be better if the power wasn’t so broad and had a few more restrictions or exploitable weaknesses. Also, what need would she have for a school to teach her about using her powers if she already knows how to use them pretty well?

What you have for the appearance is fairly decent as well, but a bit more detail would be nice. We would like you to paint a picture, so to say, with your description. Give us as much detail as possible. As well, her fashion style and what people could see her dressed in normally is required for the sake of cutting down descriptors in posts and not have to establish the same outfit over and over.

Personality-wise, the character could use a bit more work. Detail a bit more about her overall, this section is meant to be a summary of her psyche, so give us some insight on what makes her tick. Most people tend to not like bullies, what else makes her angry? What makes her go out on full on rage? What are her fears, what scares her the most and how does she cope with it? What about goals and ambitions? I know she is young, but that doesn’t stop her from having them. What would she like to achieve? Does she even know what she wants to achieve? Just twisting a couple things around could really make this character even more interesting.

Also weakness being a silver sword, swords tend to kill or injure everyone pretty badly, so I don’t see how this is noteworthy. Especially since she lacks a weakness to silver itself.

Lastly, your RP sample is in first person. For the sake of consistency everyone here uses third person past tense. You don’t have to rewrite your sample, but keep that in mind when actually making posts here.

Just fix those up and I’ll come back to take another look.